tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360413085998158633.post2365166186262411841..comments2013-10-31T07:32:05.554-07:00Comments on Habits & Contradictions: That SmellAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10719808480713172688noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360413085998158633.post-17309570280987453442013-09-20T11:07:25.531-07:002013-09-20T11:07:25.531-07:00How can this turn bigger? It's funny, but can ...How can this turn bigger? It's funny, but can you play it this way:<br /><br />You turn to talk to him about Breaking Bad. Notice something smelly. You turn to try again, to talk about the Browns. Oh, the smell. Then you attempt it again.<br /><br />I think that would be more of a story. You'd be writing a moment instead of reflecting on something that's probably--in the long run--not worth reflecting on.<br /><br />See how a small change might make this about your mind and your perceptions and a specific moment in time?<br /><br />Good start.<br /><br />Davehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03007804760439414596noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360413085998158633.post-33730440734435188292013-09-20T08:03:04.348-07:002013-09-20T08:03:04.348-07:00Yessir. Same smell today during the exam. Woof. Yessir. Same smell today during the exam. Woof. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10719808480713172688noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360413085998158633.post-78693656598279882382013-09-20T07:43:12.952-07:002013-09-20T07:43:12.952-07:00I'm not sure if I'm into the smell of smok...I'm not sure if I'm into the smell of smoke "moving into (your) nose." That's just a personal preference, but I think there has to be a better way to phrase that, you know? On the other hand, I like your "interacting with the odor" line. That is great, in my opinion! I take it this is from Comm Law?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18221061724314783265noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360413085998158633.post-17913376981744550542013-09-18T16:47:50.713-07:002013-09-18T16:47:50.713-07:00I feel you here too - you capture that sense of no...I feel you here too - you capture that sense of not wanting to be rude and say anything, but desperately wishing to lose your sense of smell and avoid the noxiousness brewing next to you. If you had known that your friend was hungover or something, it might have been interesting to hear that story, but you seem to focus on just getting the hell away as soon as you could. I agree with Kristen, you smelling your coffee to clear away the stench makes me smile. Jules Colemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02975298997124895257noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360413085998158633.post-25533614252078806412013-09-16T15:51:19.857-07:002013-09-16T15:51:19.857-07:00There are always those people in class you pray ke...There are always those people in class you pray keep walking and pass the empty seat next to you. This would be one of those people for me! I know exactly the smell, and it is so not a good one. I like how you end with your favorite smell, it adds light to the piece. Great work Chris!<br />ps. The browns part could have been left out, I'm still recovering from the loss... :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12849771308488987841noreply@blogger.com